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RE: Pay day reassurance...?

in The Ink Well3 years ago

Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well, @steph.okoh. It is very poignant and bittersweet. We see that this family is struggling under the weight of poverty. You have done a brilliant job of sharing their plight through scene description, action and dialog — which are the best techniques for involving the reader in your story. Well done!

I was wishing for a bit more information on what brought the family to this place and time. Even just a hint from our narrator about the person who may have committed the "bad deeds" that caused their plight, to give a better picture of the reason for their situation.

You are a talented writer. Please bring us more of your work!

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Thank you! @jayna for the compliments, they'll definitely go a long way.
I'm a newbie and still trying to figure this whole thing out, might have made a few mistakes.
I will definitely drop more of this series on here for more clarity.

Fingers crossed.

You are doing fine, @steph.okoh. We are all a work in progress. Do be sure to read the community rules and guidelines. We welcome short stories, but we don't accept series stories. Each post in our community must be complete on its own, with a beginning, middle and end.

Again — welcome! Check our our weekly prompt posts and our other resources. There is plenty of inspiration for emerging writers.

Thanks for the info
I’ll be sure to put those in mind in my next. My apologies for the error

Some guidance will really be appreciated