Hi, Steph,
I like your writing style. it's fluid and gets me from this scene to the next easily... it creates a picture and an idea in my head as I read.
I also like your way with words.
How close, the kids are is really touching.
The story is well written, it is just... how to say this. It doesn't give me an idea of what it is "really" about... as a short story, really unsure what I want to say. Feels like there is something missing.
Oh thanks for the feedback
I will make sure to improve on that in the next
It was actually a part from one of my novels.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts