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No title yet, sorry. Working on this in between Zack's story, Bouncer and a few other projects... as well as the mentorship programme.
As ever, FIRST DRAFT spelling, grammar, punctuation etc will not be changed or altered until I go over it as a whole after the story is finished.
HOWEVER, if there are any plot-holes, things that don't work or even suggestions on something I may use, please feel free to pipe up and let me know.
I don't really want 'good post' comments, but rather genuine replies and advice etc. I always appreciate those.
The seventh part of Dusty's 8th Adventure.
“It almost is too late! Pockle’s lamp-light is dimming. He’s almost extinguished,” the Fire Imp wailed. “If we don’t find him soon, we’ll be too late!”
“His lamp-light?” Dusty said.
“In his home, where he was born, there is a lantern. We all have one. We must revisit it every so often and replenish our energies with it. If we don’t, we die. Simples!” he said, his head low, sniffling into the tissue that Dusty had given him.
The tears had stopped flowing, but the Fire Imp was still upset and Dusty was worried his heat would set fire to the tissue.
“How long has he been away?” Dusty asked.
“A quarter of a century in human terms. That’s far too long. A decade is a long time to leave your lamp-light untended. He must be too weak to get home. That’s why I brought his lamp-light to him!” He took out a tiny, perfect lantern from his waistcoat pocket. It glowed and Dusty’s eyes widened at its beauty.
The light flickered and dimmed and the Fire Imp gasped. “Oh no, it’s worse than I feared,” he said. “Pockle is in danger of his lamp-light going out forever!”
The tissue the Fire Imp clutched in his tiny fist caught on fire because the tears that had dampened it enough to prevent it catching fire before, had dried.
He held onto the burning tissue without a worry of burns and when nothing was left but blackened paper, he flicked his fingers in an instinctive motion to send the ash up into the air, as delicate as a butterfly.
“Stop wailing,” Dusty said. “We’ll find him.”
“But we don’t know where to look,” the Fire Imp said.
“That’s true,” Dusty said and pondered the predicament for a moment or two.
She was distracted by a bump against her shin and the deep rumble of Nightshade’s purr vibrating up her leg.
Dusty looked down.
Nightshade looked up at her and slow-blinked. Then the cat looked across at the male Phoenix.
Dusty’s eyebrows rose as she realised what Nightshade was telling her.
“I wonder,” she said.
“What is it? What do you wonder about?”
“I wonder if we could ask the Phoenix to take care of the lamp-light for a while?” she said.
“We can’t leave it!” the Fire Imp said in a panicked voice.
“OK, that’s fine,” Dusty said. “But I do think the Phoenix will be careful with it.”
Dusty went across to the Phoenix. He watched her approach and she bowed as before, deep and respectful.
The Phoenix bowed in return and she looked to Nightshade to explain things.
Nightshade looked up at Dusty and slow-blinked, but he didn’t approach the Phoenix.
Dusty was at a loss.
“Nightshade can’t talk to the Phoenix, silly girl!” the Fire Imp said. “I told you this wouldn’t work!”
Dusty sighed when she realised the Fire Imp was probably right after all.
She heard a noise from the crevice, a clattering of rocks and a scrabble of claws. The scaled horns of a small red and orange dragon appeared, then the rest of its head, neck and wing tips emerged over the edge and it clambered up onto the plateau.
“Phew, that was a climb,” it said.
“Why are you climbing?” Dusty said.
“Well, my wings aren’t broad enough to catch the thermals to get lift-off without flapping. If you flap your wings down near the lava rivers, you’re in danger of singeing them and that means no flying. So the only thing to do is get high enough to leap off and get a start that way, or climb up high enough to get a running start,”
I like all the fantasy creatures and how they interact and it is great to know the dragon isn't burning.
Dragons, when they're young, like this one, can get their wings singed and so can't fly.
"Simples"?
I don't really know, sorry. Is this a typo or a way of speaking?
That's how he speaks :)
(I borrowed it from a meercat on television).
Hi there! Nice to see another “Gent” out here!
I’m originally from the U.K but I live in Australia now.
that many Gents knocking about :)Hi! We went over to Australia a few years back. Thanks for contacting me. I'll let my husband @s0u1 know, he's doing our family tree and there aren't
I’m happy to help with any information regarding the family tree. 👍 I’m originally from Cornwall my dad who is a Gent was born in burnley. Any ways nice to meet you.
AWESOME! I'll make sure he gets in touch!
An excellent chapter. I read it with pleasure. But today we have a truly international women's day. That's why I want to congratulate you on this women's festival. I wish you always be such a beautiful woman. I wish you that your man will always love you and you have never been in conflict with him. I congratulate you on the holiday of spring, beauty and love.
The main thing is that in your life there will always be joy and good. As they say in my homeland:"Люби и будь любимой". In translation it means "love always and be loved."
Let in your life there will be a success! Happy holiday :)Hi @michelle.gent
Thank you.
"Люби и будь любимой"
to you, too.
your writing adventure part 7 is comprehensive..
i appreciate your post...
well writing..... well information,,,, thanks for shreing...
your activity adventure 7 is a nice creative.
carry on please...
You just put in a lot of effort into your writing and that is worth appreciation. The way you go deep into the core of story, the way of explaining everything is just magnificently presented.
Thank you.
“Nightshade can’t talk to the Phoenix, silly girl!”
What a Saucy Fire Imp. LOL
They usually are :)
How could dusty even think that the phoenix would be careful with the lamp light?
Well probably that how well she trusted the phoenix.
Great chapter.
Thank you.
this is a lovely writeup.i love it @michelle.gent
I see this story as a comparison between the past and the present. But that's just my conclusion. I have not explored clearly on this storyline. Can you explain in more detail to me.
I live in the country of Indonesia with the condition of people who are still many left behind. Most of the villages in Indonesia still need a lot of infrastructure.
Are you interested in my story about Indonesia?
A comparison between past and present? With Fire Imps and talking dragons?
Wow... you have an interesting life...
:)Thank you @michelle.gent
well the seventh part will be very well & intersting. feeling same here like dusty. we will wait for next one. good time passing my self when i will visit your blog & reading your story.
I feel so much excitement about Dusty's story.. When I was reading this from part 1, I was imagining the things and the situations of this fantasy story. It seemed like I'm in the world of the past. Well, I felt envy for Dusty of being with the the pets of Drake. And I was thinking after I read this Part 7, how old is Dusty here? Sorry for asking @michelle.gent, I'm just getting to started to the next part. The questions in my mind now are:
I can't wait to read the part 8...
I'm a Thai National and I'm new here at Steemit. I do have 2 horror stories that I had written recently which I called it "Creepy Tales" that I originally wrote and some poetry that I had written a weeks ago.And @michelle.gent
If you don't mind, I would like you to read these two stories that i'd written recently.
https://steemit.com/writing/@thidaratapple/creepy-tales-by-thidaratapple-1-the-ghost-of-the-trash-keeper
https://steemit.com/writing/@thidaratapple/creepy-tales-by-thidaratapple-2-the-18th-floor
I just want to know if my English writing is ok and want to hear some comments from you because I saw your post and you're one of the mentors in writing here at Steemit. It feels good to be mentored by a good writer.
Thank you very much and I will wait for the part 8. Hopefully you'll post it tomorrow. 😊
I've taken a look at the story you put in the #story-mentor tag and I think you have to work on how to project your story.
Your English seems to be good, but there is a lot of 'info-dump' in the story.
Details you don't really need are dropped into the beginning and it detracts from the story.
From what I've read of your work, you need a lot of guidance.
I hope this feedback doesn't upset you, there is a potential, your idea is good, the telling of it needs work.
I wrote the feedback here because I didn't want to put this at the bottom of your story. I hope that's ok for you.
I didn't felt upset when I read your comment from my work @michelle.gent. I'm very thankful for you by letting me know my mistakes at my work. I will do my best on writing and thank you for letting me use #story-mentor. :)
Hi @thidaratapple,
Dusty is around 18 years old in this.
I can't answer any of your other questions as I'm still writing the story, but I'll try to answer at least some of them as I'm writing.
Please feel free to use the story-mentor tag for your stories, I do try to read them, even if the person isn't in the mentorship group. If I like what I see, I may invite you to join the group.
Thanks for commenting :)