I've taken a look at the story you put in the #story-mentor tag and I think you have to work on how to project your story.
Your English seems to be good, but there is a lot of 'info-dump' in the story.
Details you don't really need are dropped into the beginning and it detracts from the story.
From what I've read of your work, you need a lot of guidance.
I hope this feedback doesn't upset you, there is a potential, your idea is good, the telling of it needs work.
I wrote the feedback here because I didn't want to put this at the bottom of your story. I hope that's ok for you.
I didn't felt upset when I read your comment from my work @michelle.gent. I'm very thankful for you by letting me know my mistakes at my work. I will do my best on writing and thank you for letting me use #story-mentor. :)