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RE: Wreckage - TWB 100 Word Writing Contest

in #100words6 years ago

Nice! You did a great job of setting a scene and creating a very suspenseful storyline, @foragingquietude. You also incorporated a great last line that adds a nice twist.

I suggest one edit. I think you want to say "I'm awakened" in the fourth sentence. I can see why you would go with present tense, since your story is told in present tense, but "awakened" is correct.

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Ah yes. I agree it should be "awakened". I'll get that changed. Thanks @jayna!