The story is well-written, with strong characters and good pacing. Bravo, @churchboy!
We readers learn by the fourth paragraph that Angela is not the killer. The suspense might have been greater if we were kept unsure of this until later in the story. However, our knowledge of her innocence does make us anxious on her behalf when the Iyi tests her. How will she endure, we wonder, if a wrongful accusation is added to her grief and loss?
One aspect of the plot that I question is the fact that the murderer, John Gala, is the one who calls attention to the fact that his victim, Andas Onye, is missing. It may be considered unrealistic for the murderer to set the search for the victim in motion. John has nothing to gain and everything to lose by doing this.
It is fortunate for the chief priest and the other suspects that John Gala confesses. What if the Iyi had falsely accused him? In some ways, the story might be more interesting if the Iyi's judgment had been wrong, though the story would also have to be much longer then. Someone, perhaps the dubious king, would have to save John from being strangled. Then the real culprit would have to be found somehow. It would be especially satisfying if Kachi — who disliked John and also maneuvered John into taking the trial — were the one to identify the real murderer, lifting suspicion from his erstwhile enemy.
Next time I write a story, permit me to send to you. You have made the story much more interesting than I could have. Thank you so much for your advice. Those twists would have made the story more interesting. You are a great writer. I will surely check you out. Thank you.
You are a great writer. I upvoted your story and followed you because your talent is obvious from this piece. Don't let my criticism discourage you, I'm just trying to get you to look at your stories from different angles. All the best!
Oh, I appreciate it. It is so rare that someone would read a story here on Steemit and offer such unique perspective. Thank you for that and for the support.