I have had some great editorial feedback, but it does require a decent change in style not to rhyme or use the alliterative imagery, then again, I do like a challenge, I have a really old poem that I wrote that is like that, so I just need to find that vibe again. I am aimed for more objectively good, and in some ways it is trying to be something I am not, but only by pushing my edges will I ever know where they are :)
Also thank you, I was really down last week and just bleh, so yeah, thank you