Hiya again iamthegray
Congratulations. I declare you the winner of 5SP!
Sshh, I won't tell anyone you were the only contender ;p
This is an excerpt from a speculative fiction novel. It introduces a cult leader and aims to reveal his character as well as something about the world of the story.
Unfortunately, Boyo commits the sins of thinking for himself
Well spotted.
It's interesting to discover how you feel this story. You see it as an attack on Christianity (it's not). Your critique focused more on how you feel about Christianity being attacked rather than on the nuts and bolts of the writing. It kinda came off the tracks there. A critique is about providing something useful for the writer to work with. Although there's always room to challenge ideas and beliefs, a critique should be objective if it's to help the writer develop their skills. Ideas -- well they're all subjective.
Thanks for taking part.
cheers
Anj :D
Thanks for the feedback.
It was nice doing a criticism (for the first time). Hope to learn more
Thanks for the cash prize too.
Blessings
Hiya. It was a great effort for a first time critique.
Lol spend it wisely.
Take care
Anj :)
Yeah, I will
Plan to use it to sponsor my next writing contest
Excellent :D
I'll keep my eye open for that so I can try to win it back ;D
cheers
Anj
You wish
You may check it out though
https://steemit.com/thegraycontest/@iamthegray/thegraycontest-announcement-of-last-week-winners-and-this-weeks-contest