Welcome to Echoes, a compilation of Poems. This one goes by the name, Unfolding Life. I as an author, had these thoughts running while penning it down. However you (readers) can interpret it in your own way and leave comments on your narrative.
Mood - Realistic
Tone - Serious
Form - Free Verse, as it does not follow any set pattern
Figure of Speech - Apostrophe
PS - It should not be confused with Apostrophe ' the punctuation markIn the following lines of the poem, Unfolding Life, Cherry paints a picture with light and darkness to portray the bitter sweet subtleties of life. The different facets of life is depicted, which is uncertain. It is said, that it is only after the darkest hour, that you can see a streak of light at the horizon, which rekindles in us the hope - that a bright beautiful day isn't far behind.
Life can be mean and sympathetic in sync. Its only a matter of time. All we need is patience and a clear sight to apprehend, "Whatever happens, Happens for good". Life with its twists and turns takes away only to give you better in return. Even death, which being its last fold is unable to break the vicious circle of give and take of life, the greater part of which is still left to be endured.
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Unfolding Life
photo credit: gipsypixel
Life, in the meanest of situations,
Sometimes proves to be a blessing.
No one knows, the rules of life.
The folds, when unfolds,
Reveals mysterious truths..
Consciously that isn't possible to accept.
The pain given by it,
tears followed by suffocation
And the last fold,
Accompanied by death itself.
Life has taken a lot,
has given even more.
But still,
A greater reciprocity remains.
Hey there from the seniors with teammalaysia. I thought I should give you a few thoughts on the poem. It's a creative process but I hope a few pointers. First I think it lacks cadence. That or I am missing it. Aside from that, I think the starting of it can and should draw the reader in, so something along the lines of 'my soul wails at the injustice of life' something a bit more dramatic.
These are all suggestions by the way. Been a while since I last taught literature hahaha. Anyways, all the best, le me know if you need help
Thanks, I have taken the feedback in a constructive way and added more context around this poem. I have a series of my poems that I will be sharing with the audience. Will use some of the pointers here in my future work too. Thanks and do let me know if the readers will be able to relate to my work.
Life is surely a blessing , teaches Us a lot out of hard times and blesses Us a lot when we do our best
yea!! Every step u take is a lesson!
It surely is (y)
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