You've got a good start but it will be much better if both lines will compliment with each other, though it may not all. And poems are feelings you put down and written. Try to synchronized each end words with same tone as much possible it will add more flavor in ur poems. Overall, good job :)
Ayy tanawa ra lines diay na ako na suwat! Stanza mn gud unta hehehe Doo lagi ko maayo bga kritiko! I mean dli kaau sila maglagyo sa una nga stanza how can I put it "let's say they both have same beauty before nimo sila bulagon." Ayyy unsaon lisod hahaha
@abduljelil Thanks! Is it really lovely? Hahaha. Anyways, did you also participate in this contest? I would like to read your works
You've got a good start but it will be much better if both lines will compliment with each other, though it may not all. And poems are feelings you put down and written. Try to synchronized each end words with same tone as much possible it will add more flavor in ur poems. Overall, good job :)
Noted. What do you mean by:
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I will definitely take your suggestion when I will write my next poem. Salamat @dianargenti
You're so nice for commenting on this post. For that, I gave you a vote!
Ayy tanawa ra lines diay na ako na suwat! Stanza mn gud unta hehehe Doo lagi ko maayo bga kritiko! I mean dli kaau sila maglagyo sa una nga stanza how can I put it "let's say they both have same beauty before nimo sila bulagon." Ayyy unsaon lisod hahaha