Ohh yeah I remember this one. Even at that time I find her story pretty compelling, so you should definitely write it down one of these days, spider ^_^.
On the current version, I can see better highlights and shadows on the picture, especially on the water and the sky, so I definitely think that you have improved the picture by inking it :D
Good job :).
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Thank you, @scrawly ! I am glad you remembered her :)