"In Petition, I like how he warns of the dangers of continuing to rely so heavily on candles for light because to produce more you have to bring in more sheep which will scalp the land and then they would have to kill more whales which I think is horrible for the simple act of producing light." I like this as your opener it set a very different tone than the other essay I had. I agree us as mankind have done horrible things to get stuff we believe we need or want in this world. We are selfish always have been always will be. The first thing we did on earth was eat an apple right after we are told we weren't supposed too. Every since that day we have been wired to make those decisions. Even, if you have other beliefs the same thing has happened. Everyone is selfish and we all know that even with in ourselves. I love your third paragraph. He is very aggressive and passionate during this part and you can see that. It combines the the greed and our government which I thought was very well used. When you give mankind power they go wild with it. Same in our government, especially when one side stacks. One side gets to choose everything and the other has no say. It shows how when one or a group get power they do whatever they so please to do with it. It shows he was scared of that and already saw that change coming. At the end of the paragraph you talk about how they will bend ot for their personal will. We have had that problem for awhile now. It has become making laws or bending laws for own personal gain. Even doing events or other things to try and get recognition for own personal benefit. I think you do great at the end with in a way summing it all up and just using you ropion on it. Also with doing that in a small paragraph. It lets the readers form their own opions and then at the end hear yours and they can agree, disagree or even mix and match between these.