Hmmm, wrote the original in 2011...never sounded right to me. Came back this year to revisit, thinking I had a way to bend it to my liking, but no dice. If it can stimulate a new thought or two in a couple people, then that should be good enough.
I like the idea of new equilibrium - it sort of presupposes that the idea of actual equilibrium is nonexistent, therefore we choose to accept fleeting moments of a false perception as reward for a struggle toward a non-actual.
Good luck on your search :)