A great read, fast-paced with lots going on to hold the interest. Flipping between the different scenes works very well I think. You set so many things in motion in what seemed like a very short chapter that I was left at the end most definitely wanting more.
Yo, nice, thank you. :)
I certainly enjoyed writing again. I'll try to keep it up. I'll also proofread in the future. @bethalea mentioned typos, hah. I just kinda wanted to publish something just to see if anyone cares these days.