I very much like this dramatic moment. It's fun to think about the ways a story could get here. The lover was demonic, the father was on the opposition... classic. I also like the "trained surprise" reaction from the point of mourning. And that moment of falling. Really beautifully done.
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:))) Thank you <33
I'm happy that you liked it as much as you did :) And I love the storyline too, for some reason. I don't know if some parts will be considered cliché, but most of it is an attempt at beautiful originality.
I'll try to write a few more stories about this universe, although I sometimes find it hard to fight my perfectionist impulse to throw everything away when I'm not 100% satisfied with it.