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RE: Shine

in #fiction7 years ago

Jess was right, this story is so you.

Every time you repeated the "Our brothers, sisters and cousins," I liked it.

The darkness was nice, familiar.

This line in particular stood out to me. The softness of the narrative. Its unwinding cadence.

The ending was 100% Inna, no doubt about it. But my favourite part was probably how the shoe described a morning-time person, and them waking up as the day progresses. Though, that's a really fast markdown, I must admit.

A good story, though I think the ending, although very you, is not what made it a good story. It's an atmospheric telling for me. What "happens" in this one is almost coincidental.