Interesting ideas. Your visuals are very good, a little polish on your language choices, such as "bounce" instead of "jump" when you speak of her hair. Also, while it seems unintended, many may read this as sexist, since your narrator seems to assume the woman is too weak to rob him before it happens. Although, maybe that was your intent. Keep writing! Nice post! @markrmorrisjr
Okay. Thanks.
Sorry if my tips were overwhelming, I taught for many years, sometimes it just creeps out. I liked your post, but I probably didn't say that part very well.
It's okay. The correction is well appreciated. Thank you very much.