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RE: A Chapter from my Novel in Progress / Impressions and advice welcomed!!

in #fiction7 years ago

I like it you have a gift for writing. I did find one spelling mistake & have a few suggestions for word adds please feel free to ignore you are the author,
The dry, gray walls remind me of the labs. Grey*. -- must have loved birds because there must be at least 50 cages stacked up like a zoo themed maze. Maybe slip the word 'Aviary' in there. -- giving off that old * smell of comfort. Maybe slip the word 'musky' in there. -- I slip into a * grateful silence Maybe slip the words 'graceful &' in there.
I agree with the comment by Conwaaay keep up the momentum & get it all on paper before editing. The hard bit is getting thought's on paper in the first place & all of that is within your adventurous & vivid imagination & you have that in spades.
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thank you! i will certainly take all the spelling/grammar advice I can get! I will keep it in mind when I do my editing.. hopefully will be finishing up in a few months. Have about 31k words, estimated like 45k so I'm sure the editing time will sneak up quick. lol
So happy you like it too! thank you for reading and your helpful comments. :)