Hi @t2tang. I really enjoyed reading this, it felt just like watching a manga cartoon to me, but in fiction form. I love the sultry feel of this imagined future -
And then he heard the blue notes in their coos and giggles, in the empty platitudes that they cast at him, the faux-admiration of his skill and girth. He saw the boredom in their perfect eyes.
The descriptions of new technologies are handled with subtly
He fumbled for his holophone, trying to turn off his alarm. When he hit it, a bright blue screen popped up, displaying his wallet balance.
allowing me to easily picture them and their applications... and with martial arts too, what more could you ask for :-) Nice opening chapter!
There'll be another chapter today, so keep your eyes peeled. I love manga myself, so I wouldn't be surprised if you saw a bit of the influence in my writing. Thanks for reading!