I really enjoyed reading this story, Jeclyn. You did a great job portraying the emotions of each character and creating a scenario that reflects power dynamics and the mistreatment of vulnerable workers. The twist with Jennifer being the undercover CEO was engaging and gave a satisfying sense of justice when she returned after her dismissal. It showed her character's resilience and determination to understand the real situation in her company.
One suggestion I'd make is to clarify the transition moments a bit more, especially when Jennifer is revealing her role as the CEO. Adding more detail around those scenes could enhance the impact of her revelation and help readers follow the story flow better. For instance, when she reappears as the CEO after being sacked, you could add a bit more about the reactions of the other characters, especially Nancy, to emphasize the surprise and shift in power.
Overall, it's a powerful narrative with a meaningful message about standing up for what's right, regardless of one's position. Great work!
Thank you for your suggestions. It's actually a long story I'm writing on decided to make a summary of it. Will work on your suggestions.