Lovely tale. The use of names and dates made it quite realisitc. I had an issue with the poetry though. What I do is put it in as an interlude, so it does not seem to be there by mistake. If you don't want to do that. You can make it a song being sang by the prisoners or something. My personal opinion though. Still, it's a great story.
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Thank you so much.. I have taken note of this.