50-word story: She Never Stopped

in #fiftywords7 years ago

She never stopped to wonder why walnuts looked like brains or why baseball players were so rich or why five was the perfect number of ice cubes in a lemonade. She just knew these things were so.

And that's why I didn't really like her. She never stopped to wonder.

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Pretty good small story. Almost a poem, even. Not a f-art poem, but I can appreciate this, little brotha.

It did feel like poetry but I gotta tell that this popped into my head on its own. Was like hearing a narrator on television open a movie. So I probably shouldn't take any credit for it at all! ha

Lovely character formation in only 50 words.

Walnuts look like brains because they are good for your brain 🧠, nature wanted to make sure you knew.

ha ha thanks

Love this, very nicely turned story... sweet and sour!

Here's my attempt at the 50 word story: https://steemit.com/fiftywords/@bentheredonethat/old-man-a-fifty-word-short-story

This is actually very good. It's not easy to keep your text short, with good structure and on the point :)

Are you going to give it a try?