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RE: Finish the Fiction Story Contest - Week #35 - @bananafish

in #finishthestory6 years ago

A sea mist accompanied with a strong wind highlighted her feminine features; her beauty the charm that dazzled all gazing upon her spectacle.

Your ending is a traditional piece with interesting moments dense of lyrism and epicity. I enjoyed the emphasis on the beauty of the Captain, counterposed to the roughness of the scene.