I'm a bit annihilated by the level of depth shown in the comments. You got some literary critics, by @agmoore and @calluna, that assurge to the professional level. I will just humbly add that your idea for the FtS reminds me of a Renga(連歌, collaborative poetry). A form of poetry from which the haiku was born, specifically from the opening stanza. Probably, a choka (long poetry) would be a better reference as the Renga was collaborative. Your poem is too subjective to enter in the haiku sphere though, and owns most probably to the senryu genre. I loved the allusion to the myth of Narcissus and the blend between oriental and occidental philosophy. An interesting experiment, overall.
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UwU ~ Thanks for finally commenting for once and reading!~ (Still love yah, babunia~)
Anyways, I wonder if they extended the same for all else (this will be great in general as it would at least make topics more interesting and our hearts more cathartic). Should've launched a nuke while yah were at it @f3nix, because yer holding back on that cultural knowledge (yah should make a post about the types of Japanese poetry). Of course I misnomenered and defiled the Haiku name, which honestly deserves me to be pimpslapped; however I will raise a point concerning that the bounds of subjectivity is always dependent on objectivity as well (a famous Hegelian thing the Marxists would pick up and finally finish open). Of course I made them stand out, however his subjectivity was consumed and then spitted back out after the dialectic of the water scene. (Which of course yah already highlighted the majority of the themes, and my authorial input that Joan of Marc hid a quiet dialectical theme for me to tug at.) At the end of the day, mines probably is the blurring of all formalism within Japanese poetry as at which "there is a point at which methods devour themselves" (Frantz Fanon).