Reading your continuation, I breathe drama, sense of danger, mystery. I'm breathtaking! It's your great ability to convey feelings without actually explaining anything of the mysterious facts that involved the poor boys.
On one hand, I'd like to know everything, to understand what's behind in a much broader story, but on the other hand I recognize that, given the brevity of the form of this contest, the story is ok like that, it's structured perfectly and it doesn't need any addition.
It's like a clockwork mechanism designed to convey those feelings in the reader and leave them in suspense
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You have exactly understood how I wrote this in a way that has made me think about it myself. I have heard many a mention of the old show/tell in writing, and it never occurred to me, but this is one I wrote entirely in emotion and feelings. Even the background descriptions came from emotions. I did try and answer more of the mystery in the first few drafts, but realised that it was possibly taking away more than adding, and ended up just leaving it even more open. I am just so happy that the feelings came through, and that they carried the suspense with it without putting in hard edges that shed more light on the mystery, it was hard to resist, especially having an intention of what that answer would be, but ohhh made me so happy!! <3