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RE: 16 days of literature: Particle Ghost

UwU ~ Thanks for reading and thanks for the compliments! (I've been meaning to ask since when did SBI started giving comments upvotes? What's this secret club I've been missing out on?)

Hue hue hue, that indeed was what I waiting for @brisby~

Very convenient that the kitter look'd adorable in the bed~ c:

I certainly had fun with the two lassies (one trans-fem being referenced with "they" and the blinded lassie referenced with "her"). Probably the most fun I had in a while with a #foxtales contest as I could explode into something nice and happy to read. A pure enjoyment read of two gals having a great time~

Glad that I've nailed this first attempt (it was, I barely edited it after I touched on the very end to fit the 500-word limit); especially with all the references to Nature. Indeed, that's the one magic that I've worked around; to take one tell-tale for another (older) one due to me thinking a bit long on the murkiness of the water (signifying an easy escape from doing a body-in-the-river story and, at the same time, showing an older tale which got murky thanks to the new tale). Unto my haiku-chain, I see you've payed attention to details very clearly and the ambiguity of the particle ghost. The particle ghost being both teacher and a reflection of his love life (of which got tainted by his efforts to become the respectable person he is and now can he only admit to the hypocrisy). At the end, he's been given a lesson in his dying years and finally sees the beauty of his rival's actions; of which leads him to peace finally that he couldn't of have while being perturbed by the rival. (Authorial plug-in: And no more afraid, he tries to do his best to leave the World as it is, to respect the wills of others and believing in his own.)

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Not sure when SBI began upvoting comments but it seems a recent thing. Looks like they're doing it across the board. Thanks, Felix!