Hmm... There's some problems with the formatting and who's talking. I understood the differing POVs, just they came a little sudden (like a jump-cut in a movie). I would suggest like a little transition sentence so you can show the different POVs. Other than that, I didn't had to re-read this story as I could grasp the situation, but for others it may be hard. Anyways, upvot'd and resteem'd.
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Working on POVs could be highly beneficial.