OH Man @meesterboom this post is Great but
A nice story and I like the role of Mr. C.
Sounds like an interesting personality
Even though there is no description of his body or more detail about it you describe him
Smoking outside
This is the first time I've really read the story.
Is there a previous part or something? Events are very advanced
Haha, I rarely paint a picture of a person. Instead allowing the reader to fill in those large gaps and come to an agreeable character!
Oh, that's great.
If we thought one of the characters was a man.
and are
A female or a big age or a Young,so this little detail always better
And of course I like your style