This is my 7th entry in @bananafish . This round of the competition includes a fantastic tutorial on the traditional aesthetics and technique of Haiku, I recommend checking it out for a master class, courtesy of @marcoriccardi. In this Haiku I have tried to adhere to the 5th iteration of the Toriawase stylistic model - The prompt is the title picture above the Haiku. The images used in this post are property of @bananafish account, used with their permission. If you have enjoyed this Haiku, please check out my other work on my homepage @raj808.
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We are delighted with your return to Mizu No Oto! A good proof of the compositional technique we talked about.
Cheers @bananafish 🙂
Yeah, it took all my willpower to pull away from my past insistence of sticking to 5/7/5 format. But I can see that the style, aesthetic and economy of words is more important than any strict syllabic structure 🙂
It was fun delving deeper into the different traditional models of haiku 👍
I am here to droll as I can never do haikus justice. All the best :)
Ha ha, well haiku are a specific form.... and I've done them wrong in the past ;-)
I am unsure how to master this even as @chinyerevivian challenges me to keep trying. It's the hardest form of poetry to me :(
Hahah look where my photos end! How poor these winemakers in the north-east of Italy, aren't they (I'm not one of them, unfortunately, I just drink their wine).
Refreshing and delicate haiku, there's hosomi and karumi in it. Although I don't like similes that much in haiku, in this case it was a nice surprise.
I should have guessed it was a vineyard! The garden area you can see off the the left, I imagined as beans growing up poles, is grapes. Nice, I wish we could grow grapes here, one of my favorite fruits :) Iy could probably work with grapes also...
vines run wild -
sun-kissed buds burst open
as birds chorus
Here's another for you. This is in October, a more appropriate and haikable season for those places 😉
Burnt umber leaves
Shelter grapes blossoming -
Earth born harvest.
😉👍🙂
Yes this is much better! There has been so much work done pruning: grapes, trees, hedges. But no beans!
Ah... but what about jack and his magic beans!!! 😉
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You and I saw a lot of the same in that photo, the life bursting out. But I do not see any beans. lol.
Yeah, for me it was all about the life and growth in that image. I forgot how much I enjoy Mizu No Oto
I love it too. I find it intriguing and relaxing.