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RE: Legit Life Hack - The Wim Hof Method : How it works

in #health8 years ago (edited)

For some reason this doesn't "flow" the way you intended. It reads like a novel. Maybe less references, and more you could help?

Especially when you start off with Part One, Part Two, Part Three

You have a lot of good material and things to say. Just a suggestion.

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Yeah, tell me about it. I was all over the place writing it. Lol!
This was my first time writing a post ever. So bear with me. I'm not here to make a living on posting but I sure would want to improve on my writing. I'll try to make improvements on my style of writing the next time I get an itch to write something. Thanks for the feedback bro :)