"This needs to be edited. I can't tell what is going on." Then I understood! Memories are time travel.
YES! You nailed it - and perhaps I kinda did too, if you understood it. As I said last week, I was trying to use a similiar structure to the novel I'd read, which I found confusing at first but then as I understood how it related to his larger theme, I found it interesting. I love experimenting with structure like this as it pushes me out of my comfort zone.
Of course, it needs further editing, but you know what HIVE stories are like - sometimes it's better just to publish and be done with it lest you spend time on something no one will understand or read haha!
Thanks for reading, and pushing me to writing. I didn't realise I could post in Freewriters - I honestly don't need the chastisement. I wish some other communities just had a white list so I didn't have to bother with that. When you have been around a while you expect to be trusted.
Writing doesn't get high rewards on HIVE, I can finely admit. We do it because we love the process - and of course engagement from our writing friends xx