Excellent storyline @hopestylist, very imaginitive and captivating, just like Dan!
Um, you should make it a habit to read your story out loud and look for errors, there are a few in your story.
"The city had a Mayor that was in charged" is the first, should be "that was in charge".
Awesome job!
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Thank you so much for stopping by and for the observation, I will try better next time.