It is safe to say... you have been "Noticed"
This was wayyyyyy better than your last handful of entries. Good job man, nice freestyle and flow. Try and do it one take next time, practice makes perfect, I like that you took a more positive approach and your attitude is also a humble one, it‘s a beautiful thing to see, this is the community we need, I want to see more lyricism, wordplay, more passionate louder rapping with smooth and aggressive flows, different styles and speeds of rhythm, I am seeing your potential. Let‘s see what you do next.