Your stress didn't really come through in the writing, maybe if I was in person with you when you're talking about it I would see it. I get anxious even reading letters from so-called 'authority', and hate being in the vicinity of anyone in those scary costumes!
As for Meatloaf...that's the soundest theory I've heard yet for that song!
I just read back over it and you're right, I was trying to keep the story fast paced and in the editing process Sarah helped me cut the story down from four pages down to two, but with that, I inadvertently turned myself into a bad-ass. Not good... lol
LOL!!!