Thanks a lot, Ry! I hope you won't be (secretly) disappointed with yours later. I said secretly because I'm sure you're too kind to say that haha.
I knew before it was posted that there must be rooms for improvements still, despite my hundreds attempts at re-reading and re-writing it. But a whole post long of mistakes? God that is so embarrassing XD
I will not be disappointed secretly or otherwise!
It's not a whole post of mistakes XD I picked up a few things that I would have made suggestions for if you'd wanted them, nothing really major, didn't detract anything XD