Before her body could meet the floor, the man tugged the swaddle off her and cradled his baby. Savvy crumbled to the floor, her mouth slightly parted as tears rolled out of her eyes.
You could use this line in a master class on demonstrating action!. The whole piece moves swiftly, and economically. You pack in not one punch, but several. No word wasted. No extraneous details.
We know the woman. We know the killer. We know, even, the mother of the baby.
Really, really well done @kemmyb.
It means a lot to read your thoughtful and generous comment on this story. I was aiming to write something short with some action and knowing it turned out so is rewarding. Thank you so much for your visit. Your kind words and support are inspiring.
Have a wonderful day, and I almost forgot... Happy Thanksgiving! ☺️✨
Thank you. Just finished stuffing the celery and setting up the candied sweet potatoes. My daughter is making the main dish :)
Hope you have a wonderful day, @kemmyb