RE: A Naked Lady in the Forest

[cliffagreen]

I suck at identifying meter, but this reads very well, not at all forced to meet the requirements of the form you are using. The rhyme works too. Perhaps the last line would have more impact if it stood on its own at the end of the poem, instead of getting lost in between the photos. Lines three and four really capture the magic of the moment, the sense of enchantment, and the photos complement the poetry. There is definitely some energy in this poem!

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[atma.love]

Thanks for your input Cliff. i appreciate you.

I moved the last line to between the pictures, before posting. I will move it back.

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