Thank you! Originally the poem was supposed to be even more confusing, and I was trying to limit myself to three words per line, with barely any exceptions, which gave the poem even more of that stuttered, staggered, suffocating feeling. But that version got to being too extreme and hard to read, which led to me hastily reworking the older lines into this, which explains the odd word choice. Glad you liked it!
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