This is my first post. I have been looking for ways to get my work out there. I wanted to include at least one blockchain based medium. Thank you for reading.
I drowned yesterday
Water felt fine
Cold and grey
Like my mind
I lived
With no regrets
tried to swim
Sunk instead
As my life flashed before I touched bottom
I realized I was lost, not forgotten
Water surrounded me, kept me safe
I felt it around me like a sheet
Somehow it all just faded away
When the flash stopped it began to storm
And somehow, I ended up on shore
My eyes opened, the water came out
I heard screams at heaven, but no sound
I don’t think I’ll ever understand
How I dove in the water, ended up on land
And I felt the rage, fought and died
I’ve fought that war
A thousand times.
I walked a while me, and my ghost
I wasn’t surprised when I got home
Opened the door, and I was alone
My ghost and I sat at the bar
Tears fell, they stung my scars
And was that rain hitting the floor
My ghost frowned, and wailed with the storm
I thought it was breathing with me
Maybe it was all in my head
Woke up sad but certainly not dead
As I looked at the ceiling I realized
I wasn’t alone, my ghost was at my side
I drowned yesterday, but I am fine
I’ve fought that war
A thousand times
-Brian Ridgway
There’s something dark and thrilling about this piece. It’s almost like a living thing, about the gore of the human condition.
Great first post @oldschoolzen I hope you share more, welcome to hive welcome to this community for poets.
Thank you. That is very much what I wanted it to be. Hearing that I it got there is music to my ears. Thank you so much for the welcome.
A poem with a lot of exasperation, very unique and different, Welcome ♥
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Thank you very much for the information. I’ll get to work on an introduction post tomorrow, and thank you so much for the warm welcome.
All I can say is: yeah & Amin. You filled my bones.
Thank you. I put everything into these. I’m glad some of it comes out the other side.
Welcome to hive and to blockchain poets. It goes crazy here. You will drink, eat & of course you will give. Welcome.
I love the echoes of similar water imagery: drowning, tears falling, rain, storm. It gives this intense cohesive feeling to the whole thing.
Thank you!!! Im glad you noticed. 🙏
I really liked your poem. I like that monotony of despair, that war fought so many times that it ends up feeling good, though cold and gray, the water that drowns but keeps safe. And I like those opposites that are no longer opposites: screams, but no sound; drowned, but fine. A sweetly desperate poem.
Thank you very much. I am doing my best to put myself out there. I decided it’s time to be a starving artist. 😂