I liked your poem, maybe I'm old fashioned (I don't know) but I wasn't a big fan of the .... you employed I don't see what they really added. Some speech parenthesis like "Annie, come see for yourself" eg could work here if you don't mind the feedback...
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Oh thanks. We are all work in progress, I appreciate your feedback and would work on it next time. Thanks a bunch π€