great to tsee the whole reason for a poems existence, you've really given us an insight into where the words were coming from. And by taking such a mundane activity you drag us into your interior world and let us experience it with you.
nice work.
If you are going to be revisiting the poem I think there are literally a very few places where dropping a word or two, or swapping a phrase round, will tighten the line.
Thank you very much for your kind words and encouragement! I am always looking for ways to improve, and appreciate the feedback a lot! Would you mind giving me an example by chance? Poetry is something I've been re-exploring lately 😄