That's a really nice heartfelt poem. We are all on a journey & forward is the best route.
On a suggestions side, I don't know if you are intending to redraught, but if so I'd suggest looking at your line openings. in a 20 line poem you start 11 of them with I or I'm and with the other I/I'm scattered through the poem it can be a little distracting.
But thanks for sharing a heartfelt poem
Sorry about that. Thank you so much. Yes, we are all on a journey...and forward is the only way to go. 🤗🤗🤗
Nothing to be sorry about.
Sometimes because we are so close to a poem as the writer, it's difficult to see past our emotional input.
I'll be interested to see any teeeks or redraughts you do.
Thank you 🤗🤗😊😊