The message of your poem is truly relatable. Two similar beginnings, but different outcomes. How what could have been the best love story dies suddenly and naturally because we got cold feet due to fears of the unknown. Without even given the love a chance. This doesn't only happen on issues of love, we also see it play out in several other issues in our lives.
I read the "Unattended gaze" and the "alarms and bells start ringing" lines as if they are the "hook" of the poem. I saw what you did there @tahminasyed and I love it.
I haven't tried this style of poetry writing before, but in one of my future poems, I will give it a try. Hopefully I will execute it as good as you did. Much love.
PS: Do you mind if I reach out to you on discord @tahminasyed?
No, I wouldn't mind it at all. My user id is tahminasyed. Feel free to knock. I am looking forward to seeing your poems. It would be much better than mine, I believe. See you around.
I was out of connection for a very good time, it is good to be back. I am sorry for replying so late.