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RE: Inconsiderate reveal...CNF #132.

in The Ink Well16 days ago


Even after all these years this still is sad to read. School relationships have a powerful influence on us. They are important to children. I'm sorry this friend was disloyal. The lesson you learned was good: don't tell people your secrets. Once you tell a secret to anyone, it's not a secret anymore.Hello @beckyroyal,

You wrote this with great effect. It was a powerful story. I do have one bit of advice: your intro paragraph is thematically related to the story but really does nothing to strengthen it. As a matter of fact, the story is powerful on its own and this paragraph I think takes from the force of the narrative.

Just my opinion. Your story, your choice :)

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Oh thanks for that pointer. I'll try my best to be careful about my intro paragraphs next time.

I appreciate your opinion and compliments on my story. I am still learning.

Thanks for reading my sad expecrience and for leaving a comment.

Best regards 🤗🌺