You do know how to make a girl cry, at least this girl, @diebitch. You start off very effectively. There is serious drama here. The man is on the verge of death. You have our attention right away. There is alienation in the family. This most of us can relate to. Even if it is not evident in our own families, we probably all know people who are estranged from their relatives.
You resolve the conflict beautifully and credibly.
A wonderful story, full of significance and well expressed.