RE: The unexpected guest

I liked this story. You develope the character of James well. You have a strong arc--everything goes fine until the appearance of Aunt Blessing. In a way, she is a blessing, although she is annoying. Because of her disruptive behavior, James learns to stand up for himself.Hello @eberechi01,

There are some issues in the story which I will point out so that in the future your writing can shine even more brightly. For one thing, proper names are always capitalized. Thus, Aunt Blessing is upper case 'A' and 'B'. Note in my first paragraph I used lower case for blessing, the word, and upper case for Blessing, the name.

Also, when you indicate quotes, you must always put a comma after a person has finished speaking. You sometimes neglect to do this. Keep your eye on POV (point of view). At one point, you are so involved in the action (that's good...relate to your characters) that you refer to James as 'me'. Be careful of that. Easy mistake to make.

I like your writing style and I think you have a good handle on structure. Pay a little more attention to details and you will see your writing improve.

Thanks for sharing this with us. Keep writing!