Hello @frosh. and welcome to the Inkwell.
You seem to enjoy writing and you certainly know how to structure a story. I expect good things from you :)
Please read the welcome comment from Inkwell carefully. We truly do appreciate (expect) engagement from our writers. It is one way to show support for others in the community.
There are some nice things I can say about your story. You offer details that bring a scene to life. You have a strong arc--beginning, middle and end. And there is conflict, poverty, which is resolved by the lottery.
I do suggest that you look at your title. In it you have the words "A Twist of Faith". I'm pretty sure you meant to write "A Twist of Fate"--although faith could work because the boy had faith in winning the lottery.
It's quite common to use faith accidentally, instead of fate. I'm sure that once you are aware of the issue, you will not make a mistake about this. From time to time we in the Inkwell may offer suggestions about your writing. This is to help you grow as a writer. You of course may disregard our suggestions.
Here's hoping your experience on Hive and in the Inwell community is positive.