Thank you very much, @jayna.This was one of those cases where what I wanted to say became more important than the way I said it. I struggled to place the scene and create the character seamlessly. It wasn't an entirely successful struggle, and yet I wanted to get to the end, to make my point. So I pressed on. Your opinion that the story is 'powerful' tells me that at least for you I made the right decision. It certainly felt good to get this out and say what I said.
I very much appreciate your reading and commenting. So much on your plate these days, and yet you find time to give me feedback. Thank you 🌷