I enjoyed your story. I found the journey on which Andrew embarked to be significant. It was a life-altering event. His challenge was the city. It's hard for people accustomed to city life to realize that this can be daunting.Hello @kedi,
He was feeling like he was part of something much larger than himself, a part of the world that was full of endless possibiliitie
He met the challenge of this overwhelming experience, and yet he was not overwhelmed. He was transformed.
I like that. When I was a child my family moved to the city and I felt a little of what you describe. Everything was different. Large. Loud. Crowded.
One comment you received addresses the character, Amy. This suggests that perhaps you should fill in the arc for that character a little more thoroughly. I didn't wonder about Amy when I read, but it is a question readers might have. What happened to Amy? You don't have to marry her, or fall in love, but you probably should end her role in the story more definitively.
Hope you don't mind the suggestion. I think you have a good feel for writing. You describe the scenes well and convey powerful emotions effectively.
I think it is an option to leave the reader wondering about the fate of some characters in the story. I just wanted the story to go around Andrew.
However I will consider these suggestions anyway.
Thanks a lot for your nice comment.