Hello @phyna,
This is a well-written story. You offer details that bring the story to life. You build tension. We can feel the students' anticipation, and apprehension. When the final test comes we wonder how it worked out. You describe the expressions on students' faces, but you don't let us know the ultimate outcome. How did you do? How did Honour do? Was that lost-in-thought expression an indication of failure? Dolly was engrossed, and other friends were engrossed. Did they pass? If the story were less well written, we probably wouldn't care. But we do. We feel a little let down at the end when you don't let us know the actual outcome.
I offer this suggestion because I think you have the skill to benefit from it. I related to the struggle before the exam--anyone who has taken serious exams can relate to this. All the more reason I wanted to know how you did, and how your friends did.
Keep writing. You have a clear, expressive style.
I should have given the story a satisfactory conclusion, I will surely improve.
Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It means a lot to me. ❤️
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